review of First Draft

i would give first draft a 55 of 60. i would give it this grade because of all the editing and costumes the have used. i would give it this grade because throughout the opening scene the have used very different sorts of editing  flying helicopters to blood coming out of the solders when they get shot. however the reason why i didn't give this full marks is because at point in the scene you cannot hear and understand  what the students are saying. however another good point is the location they have used. this is god because there is no one around and the location is perfect. they could have improved this more by giving more of the story away because you know is that they are fighting someone and a helicopter gets shot down.